Thank you for you kind help, I took me a short time to translate it, I accept you opinions, and we will print in 7 days for it is urgency, but I still need you check the else for me.
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以下是引用Yeti在2004-2-10 12:09:14的发言：
Please take time out and read company web sites on how they descibe themselves.
Once you have read two or three you will know exactly how that is done.
The word "introduction " should not be used automatically for 介绍.
When you say "introduce" a brand, you mean introducing the "brand" to the public,
and not "describing about your brand."
Source: my web page at http://www.openface.ca/~dstephen/example.htm
品牌介绍 brands introduction
About Our Brands ( best way)
Our Brands, a brief Introduction. ( verbose, not as good.)
acc中国集团经过三年的努力，通过北京、上海、福建三个独立的销售公司，将产品销售到全国各地。华东、华南、华北三大地区的销售网络正在逐步完善。acc中国集团的产品主要有美国注册的“莎迪”、在中国注册的“巴尔迪摩”、“爱酷”三个品牌。
"via" is not used for "time"
joint effort: joint effort with whom ?
通过 北京、上海、福建 you can you "via" here, but not in the place where
you talk about "3 years."
via joint effort for 3 years, we have sold our products all around china, it has registered its sales proprietorship subsidiaries beijing, shanghai and fujian, and is preparing to establish subsidiaries in eastern china, southern china and northern china.
After three assiduous years(1), we are now selling our product all over China through our three independent sales outlets in 北京、上海 and 福建. Our sales network
in Eastern, Northern and Southern China are also rapidly maturing.
Our main product is the US patented "Sandy", and Chinese patented "Pal-demo"
and "aco" brands.
(1) I don't like this. But my mind is numb right now. I
I had an extremely long and stressful day today. I am
sure some of the other people can polish this up for you. (The only problem
is that they are extrememly busy.)
I will be back to have a look at it another day.
When is this due ?
Please take time out and read company web sites on how they descibe themselves.
Once you have read two or three you will know exactly how that is done.
The word "introduction " should not be used automatically for 介绍.
When you say "introduce" a brand, you mean introducing the "brand" to the public,
and not "describing about your brand."
Other notes:
When giving a general description of the company, use "overview" or "at a glance" or "a brief
introduction", following but not preceeding, the name of the company. E.g Duck Down Garments Ltd., A
Brief Introduction.
When giving a general description of the company, use "overview" or "at a glance" or "a brief
introduction", following but not preceeding, the name of the company. E.g Duck Down Garments Ltd., A
Brief Introduction.
Source: my web page at http://www.openface.ca/~dstephen/example.htm
品牌介绍 brands introduction
About Our Brands ( best way)
Our Brands, a brief Introduction. ( verbose, not as good.)
acc中国集团经过三年的努力，通过北京、上海、福建三个独立的销售公司，将产品销售到全国各地。华东、华南、华北三大地区的销售网络正在逐步完善。acc中国集团的产品主要有美国注册的“莎迪”、在中国注册的“巴尔迪摩”、“爱酷”三个品牌。
"via" is not used for "time"
joint effort: joint effort with whom ?
通过 北京、上海、福建 you can you "via" here, but not in the place where
you talk about "3 years."
via joint effort for 3 years, we have sold our products all around china, it has registered its sales proprietorship subsidiaries beijing, shanghai and fujian, and is preparing to establish subsidiaries in eastern china, southern china and northern china.
After three assiduous years(1), we are now selling our product all over China through our three independent sales outlets in 北京、上海 and 福建. Our sales network
in Eastern, Northern and Southern China are also rapidly maturing.
Our main product is the US patented "Sandy", and Chinese patented "Pal-demo"
and "aco" brands.
(1) I don't like this. But my mind is numb right now. I
I had an extremely long and stressful day today. I am
sure some of the other people can polish this up for you. (The only problem
is that they are extrememly busy.)
I will be back to have a look at it another day.
When is this due ?
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